This is my first upload on this site, but I've been making scenarios and campaigns for quite a while.
||AoM: The Titans
I've barely even started the real thing, so don't get too excited just yet.
Courageous is the story of a young man named Klion, who is forced to become a soldier and defeat an evil force who killed the true king years ago. Under his harsh rule crime levels rose, food levels dropped, towns were ransacked and innocent men tortured and kill along with their families.
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Welcome to AOMH (or at least to the downloads section ;) )
This will pretty some up it all:
You cinematic has lots of potential.
I was rather disappointed with this aspect, over 60% of the entire time (almost a minute out of a minute and 20 seconds), was spend staring at a black screen with text underneath. This is supposed to be a movie, not a story book. When there was stuff to look at, it wasn't that compelling either (see Map Design).
Well, there actually wasn't a hole lot of actually camera tracks, but the little I did see was pretty good. The camera tracks were smooth and fluid and as you faded out between the only two tracks, there weren't any jarring transitions. However, you didn't turn off the black map meaning that I could see a huge amount of black map.
I am not really sure what to put here, I didn't see anything extremely creative and a revolt (or at least I think that's what it was, see Story) isn't exactly a new idea. There also wasn't anything terribly creative in the triggers either. May I ask as to what the circle of Kronnys was for (I just say them in the editor)?
Map Design: 2
Even a 2 is being generous. There was virtually no eyecandy except for some destroyed buildings and some cinematic dead bodies in the town that was raided. Terrain mixing! Terrain mixing is one of the main parts of map design, there was none whatsoever in your map. I suggest that you look at Tasterix's excellent map design guide:
This guide is a must-have, even if you don't install the terrain texture pack as Tasterix suggests.
Your story has lots of potential, but it was rather hard to understand. Who is this Klige, the king? Are the people who killed the king the raiders? Is it the dead man who has the look of pure savagery in his eyes (I would assume it was the raider who has this look, but in the cinematic it sounds like it is the dead person)? Also, your description on the download page hardly matches the actually story (and, like your cinematic, your description is also some what hard to understand).
It has lots of potential, but I suggest reading up on a few guides on scenario designing. Don't let this score keep you from continuing on with the campaign!
The kronnys were for a scene that I cut out, and I just left them there...
I had only 15 minutes to do this anyway, so I was just glad you weren't staring at a black screen the whole time.
I didn't want to go too in-depth with the story, this was more of a teaser anyway.