Hi! This is the MaskedRaider first cinematic!
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It's very short, full of new lighting and music, and is basically my first attempt. Please please give me constructive criticism and raitings and such to make sure it isn't my last!
The subject of the scenario is C.S.Lewises 'The Lion the Witch and the Wardrobe' a book which i admire. I have also taken inspiration from the recently released film. I have used the fantastic lighting editor to create my own unique ambience, and have taken some music from other games which i think fits perfectly.
Please download, enjoy, and tell me what you think!
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THE BATTLE FOR NARNIA REVIEW
Cinematography (representing Playability and Balance)
The viewer was thrown from one place to the other on the battlefield, a little too fast I should say. There were many flaws in the cinematic. For example, when the camera zoomed up on the white witches castle, the camera goes a bit forward before moving back, which affects the smoothness in this area. That may seem a little bit small a detail, but since it's a cinematic, it, amount a few others, count against your rating.
When making cinematic, ALWAYS work on it until the camera transitions are smooth and perfectly match up to whats happening. NEVER settle for anything less of that.
Many of your camera transitions were reasonably smooth, which is good. I am glad that you, as a newcomer, showed the ambition and dedication to make a cinematic, which many newcomers, and even a few people who've been around for a while, don't do.
The music fit right into the cinematic as well
Balance (smoothness): 1
Playability (transitions): 3
This rating applies your use of custom lighting, how you used objects to create eye candy, and your use of special effects or unit animations to better improve your cinematic.
CUSTOM LIGHTING: 4
It's really just the fact that you used custom lighting that boosts your mark. It was creative, it was implemented well, although whether it created a 'mood' I do not know.
It is because of the witches castle that you even are being marked here. It is the only sign of creativity in this area.
SFX and ANIMATIONS: 2
You used the Nemean Lions (Aslan's) roar effectively, but otherwise there was no sign in this area.
I rate map design skills and concepts like this:
1 - Shows little knowledge of map design.
2 - Shows some knowledge of map design.
3 - Snows all knowledge of map design.
4 - Shows new knowledge of map design.
5 - Introduces many new ways of applying the tools of the editor to make many unique scenes.
Refer to this chart and you will know how I marked you here
Here you got a 1.
This is because you've not shown knowledge one of the most important rules of map design, terrain blending.
What you did here, was take GrassA, and leave it as that. You could have implemented GrassDirtA, B and C to make the cinematic much more pleasing. You could have also laid down some embellishments like rock sprites and bushes (as in the small bushes, NOT the berry bushes). Under your berry bushes, you could have added GrassB. Visit our Scenario Design Library or ask questions in the Scenario Design forums to improve.
You will be rated based on how you implemented Narnia's plot.
You implemented the battle fairly well, except you left out Peter, where was he? Why did the white witch cast lighting?
Forgive me if I show lack of knowledge of the Narnia story, I only saw the movie, so I could have invalid information on what happened in the book.
In the movie, those birds through stones down upon the opposing army, the centaurs loosed arrows, Peter had to retreat, the centaur leader kills the minotaur/minoboar leader who was pursuing Peter. The white witch kills the centaur leader, then follows Peter. Peters brother breaks her ice staff. None of those events are in the cinematic.
You receive a 2.
Good Job! You put some hard effort into the making of this cinematic. To improve, visit our library, ask questions on the forums, use whatever else I mentioned/suggested, and you will do much better!
I think it was it was good had alot of sharp tracks and a lack of animations and dialog but still a good idea and good map design.
Thanks for your commments, as i said before this is my first cinematic and i now have the knowledge to set to work on a much better one.
Any more comments always welcome.