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MythWriter |
Posted on 10/17/06 @ 12:40 PM
I would love to be an author one day, so your comments on my saga are important to me. What's good, what could be improved etc. etc. Please remember that this is the first book I ever wrote and that it is far from perfect grammatically or anything like that.
Enjoy the book, and again, please comment on it!
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AOMSQT |
Posted on 10/17/06 @ 09:07 PM
i just started to read it. OMG you wrote all that? its so long!
but i guess its the same story than the campaign? anyway its look goods... i should have finished it in some days and ill post another comment
ps. sry for my bad english but i dont speak really well, in fact my first language its french. so i'll read my first book in english. yay! |
CaveTown |
Posted on 10/17/06 @ 11:17 PM
You should try to make something of your own story. Instead of using the campaign of AoM for your story. Here are some short stories I wrote for English class at school..
By Dylan Bales..
Amituién - Sand Witch Wars
Post age of the ones (owns) year 7. For the love and war of water and sand. He, the mightiest warrior of all of the Nwhaildo Desert, defeated the leader of the Water Root Witches. He defeated them by destroying the Queens scepter. He ran through the enemy lines killing all in his way. Sand Nwhaildo’s, made of sand, can die once. Water Root Witches, usually neutral to most witches made of water, they are shaped like fat women, with strange flat horns coming from their heads. They can die three times, unless hit by the scepter of the Water Root Witch Queen (they will die instantly from that). They can summon things such as tidal waves when powerful enough. Queen of the Root Witches, she is powerful and can control mostly anything she wants near the water or in the water by using water itself. He, the great warrior, is named Whaildo. He is the general of the Sand Nwhaildo Army. These battles took place in the Nwhaildo Desert. Whaildo fought long, hard and strangely. He used his whaildo (whale) like body to throw himself at the Water Root Witch Queen. She exploded to her first of three deaths. She then threw two Sand Nwhaildos at him. He became enraged with fury and attacked the queen with two Water Root Witches, he threw them at her. She did not get her second death just yet. She unhappily destroyed the witches as they fly toward her. She blasted them with her scepter. Next the great whaildo used sand to dry up the queen. He used a sandstorm. It ended up drying her left arm. Her second death still had not come. She screamed loud about her arm. Whaildo commanded her "cry your heart out". He meant it quite literally. That’s just what she did, she cried her insides out. She died a second time and ran. Ones.. A civilization made by the Aztecs to rule over the world, and to stop Jod’s(Jod: The greatest general and fully robotic one (own) following Ickh (a-uk-hhh). He was made for the colonial time (1500’s-1700’s) to the end of the times of the muskets use(1800’s-very early 1900’s) on Earth.) attacks on them. Also they are like robots, but are human and robotic, most of the time.. I, the final One (own) on this continent of Amituién (am-it-wayne), chased the queen off. War between them was ended.
Amituién - Ice Tiki Sand
Post age of the Ones (owns) year 18. Sand of the Terra Bruciacchiata Region (Italian for Scorched Land Region) clashes with the Ice of the Ice Region. Ice Tikis have long hated the warm parts of the world. They even sometimes hate the cold parts of the world. Their major goal is to completely cover the world in ice. Ice Tiki rulers have always been evil to their neighboring cities, including the city of Screrjh. Although now their next minor goal is the Nwhaildo Desert. The spies from Screrjh told of plans made by the Tikis. I the great and final One (own) in all of the Worlds of the Ones (owns) am the spy for the Haildowns of the Nwhaildo Desert. Worlds of the Ones.. Worlds that the Ones (owns) appeared into after their acceptance to not being destroyed on Earth in another dimension. I ran though many icy areas and through Foolscircle forest to get back to the Nwhaildo Desert. Each side prepared for war. The Ice Tikis prepared with great and powerful magic, while the Haildowns prepared with a few of the Sand Nwhaildos and many humans, with their physical non-magical weapons. Most of the sand Nwhaildos are dead these days. Fincheé’s Kingdom is taking over Amituién. Many adventurers are going around trying to stop him, although very unsuccessfully. Fincheé.. The king who pretended to help the Ones (owns) just to rid of them, and gain acceptance from the world by doing so.. Haildowns have prepared for three days to stop the Ice Tikis. Soon enough the enemies came into our sight on the horizon.. They came running and throwing their magic light shots at the rocks shot by the catapults. The Ice Tikis ripped right through their defenses! The Haildowns became defeated, along with the Sand Nwhaildos. After the battle it didn't matter though, because after it all the Ice Tikis became defeated by melting in the intense heat of the Nwhaildo Desert.
Amituién - Sands will Nwhaildo
Post age of the ones (owns) year 19. Very few creature now live in the Nwhaildo Desert. Lands now become pillaged a lot by outsiders in this final year of Amituién’s post age of the ones (owns). Sand Nwhaildos now became almost completely destroyed. I the final one (own) am not able to help them. Reason.. it's because I was captured and put in the Darkest Temple on Amituién, the Temple of Ruin. I am bound to stay there forever. That is unless someone kills, converts or defeats the one (own) called Ickh guarding me. Terra Bruciacchiata Region in current times now bound to being taken by Fincheé and the great adventurers who follow Ghostlloowhe (gows-two-loow) from the Land of the Ghost. Many consider Ghostlloowhe to be good, but that is mostly humans who think that. “The Sand Nwhaildos will soon be under me!” is what Ghostlloowhe said after they got to the Nwhaildo Desert. Meanwhile, the ultimate king of this age, Fincheé, now has started running to get help from the evil Water Root Witches, from the Witch Root Mountains. The Nwhaildo Desert is Ghostlloowhes next target. The city of Owlidesette in the Nwhaildo Desert started preparing with every human and Sand Nwhaildo for battle, knowing they will be defeated anyways. Whaildo is the only one able to save them. Rumors say he has good plans to stop the attack. Soon enough the battle began. Humans of the city every second 100 died, all of the Sand Nwhaildos there died. The great armies of the great Ghostlloowhe are to many, and he has creatures from all over Amituién and Fincheé's Kingdom. Once Owlidesette became his he decided to go to the South-East, and take the city of Nwhaildo. Before Ghostlloowhe and his army reached the city Whaildo confronted them in a great battle. Whaildo killed half of his army. Although in the end Whaildo lost the fight and decided to make an alliance. Ghostlloowhe accepted the alliance. End of the fights there in the Nwhaildo Desert came. Although the end of the Post age of the Ones had come once Ghostlloowhe and his armies left the world to stop Fincheé in Ola'Kan'Cal. Now a new age came, it was called Age of the Civilization of End (in other places it's known as Age of the Endnesses). Civilization of the End(Endnesses) is the end to all worlds of the Ones (owns). It takes the world into complete darkness, and consumes every last person in the world to bring the Ones (owns) closer to their destiny of "Yrosiht Eral" Endnesses language for "Real History".
(a map of the world these stories take place in. I made the map. The world is Amituién.)
http://www.extra.gamingextremes.us/AmituienJPEGHighQuality.jpg
Definitions:
Ice Tikis: A race made of complete ice. They are shaped like humans, although act like complete savages when attacking people.
Haildowns: Name after the Nwhaildo Desert. They figured out that in ancient times the desert was actually called the "Haildown Desert". It was still spelled
Nwhaildo. Although that Nwhaildo was said differently. It was spelled like that to mix up the letters in Haildown, to confuse enemies in the desert.
Worlds of the Ones (owns): Worlds that the Ones (owns) appeared into after their acceptance to not being destroyed on Earth in another dimension.
Fincheé: The king who pretended to help the Ones (owns) just to rid of them, and gain acceptance from the world by doing so.
One (own): A civilization made by the Aztecs to rule over the world, and to stop Jod’s attacks on them. Also they are like robots, but are human and robotic, most of the time.
Sand Nwhaildo’s: Sand creatures that are shaped like men, but look like sand, most of them can make dust storms, sand storms or dust devils.
Water Root Witches: Usually neutral to most witches that are made of water, they are shaped like fat women, with strange flat horns coming from their heads. They can die three times, unless hit by the scepter of the Water Root Witch Queen (they will die instantly from that). They can summon things such as tidal waves when powerful enough.
Jod: The greatest general and fully robotic one (own) following Ickh (a-uk-hhh). He was made for the colonial time (1500’s-1700’s) to the end of the times of the muskets(1800’s-very early 1900’s) on Earth.
Nwhaildo: Means Haildown. It is from the word “hail” in it, and the “do”, and “wn”. It adds up to Haildown.
Civilization of End: The civilization called End is the end to all worlds of the Ones (owns). They take the world into complete darkness and consume every last person in the worlds to bring the Ones (owns) closer to their destiny.
Also AOMSQT your first language is French, so can you help me with saying something in French? Can you tell me how to say "What happened to your hand sir?" in French? (It's because we are only supposed to ask our French teacher stuff in French :p.)[Edited on 10/12/10 @ 08:59 PM]
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MythWriter
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Posted on 10/18/06 @ 05:35 AM
Wow, weird stories Cave town, what are all those words in brackets?
(Ah I see pronunciation)
You're right, I should use my own storylines. So you'll be happy to know that I'm writing a completely original novel...120 pgs and counting! |
CaveTown |
Posted on 10/18/06 @ 07:51 AM
Wow. That's alot of pages lol. I wish to be an author someday, or a programmer for games.. Or both! |
Out Reach (id: newreach268) |
Posted on 10/18/06 @ 08:39 AM
im gonna anoy you and say I DONT HAVE WORD AND I WANNA READ :P!
update your file with a microsoft works/notpad one. |
AOMSQT |
Posted on 10/18/06 @ 04:23 PM
k cavetroll in french, its *Qu'est ce qui est arrivé a votre main, Mr. Klankey* |
CaveTown |
Posted on 10/18/06 @ 04:58 PM
Thanks AOMSQT! Now I can ask my teacher whats wrong with his hand... bwuhahahahahahaha! :P[Edited on 10/18/06 @ 04:58 PM]
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papaya (id: X_MOSS)
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Posted on 10/18/06 @ 07:59 PM
Coolieo. I can tell you put a lot of effort into it, it's very long.
So, this novel your writing. Is it for selling? Or are you going to put it online (wikibooks maybe?) |
CaveTown |
Posted on 10/18/06 @ 09:21 PM
If he sold it ES would sue him for stealing their story and writing it in his own words then selling it :p. |
MythWriter
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Posted on 10/19/06 @ 03:36 AM
i know that cavetown dont worry cuz i'm not selling it.
might sell that other one i told u about[Edited on 10/19/06 @ 05:55 AM]
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